A few questions came up when I was reading Delpit’s article. One being, is the way that we speak
varies from state to state, country to country, is this the correct way to
speak, and who is to judge the way to speak? [a long sentence]. Is there really a right or wrong way to speak?
Here in Washington it seems like we don’t have any accents. The way we speak sounds normal to us, but
when we travel to different states they sound different to us. [Compound sentence + a fanboys] Delpit
talks about how Oakland had an Ebonics debate about the African American
language. Why is that race being targeted for the way they speak, because who
is to say what the norm is for speaking? Another thing that Delpit brings up
was when she was searching the Internet and read the comments about the African
Americans during the Ebonics debate. The
people that were making those comments, about how African Americans don’t know
how to speak, are the people that are probably so ignorant to the fact that
everyone in this country speaks differently than the next. [A very
long sentence] Reading this article will help me with my writing [a shorter sentence]. It really brings
to life that you cannot judge a person for talking differently then you. To
them, you also speak differently.
You used a variety of patterns that all flowed in a way that didn't seem weird or forced. Your long sentence conveys your message really well. When you did your compound sentence + a fanboys that also came off as very nice and natural. This is just an idea and, I'm not completely sure how you would add this without having to change the content, but a fragment after your question could add a lot of power.
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